On this date in 1821, Missouri was admitted to the union as the 24th state. Originally a part of the 1803 Louisiana Purchase, Missouri achieved statehood as a slave state. It was the Missouri Compromise of 1820 that settled the controversy about admitting Missouri as a slave state, by admitting Maine as a free state (1).
Known as the “Show Me” state, Missouri’s unofficial slogan is the stuff of legend. The story goes that Missouri’s U.S. Congressman Williard Duncan Vandiver coined the slogan at a 1899 naval banquet in Philadelphia where he said:
I come from a state that raises corn and cotton and cockleburs and Democrats, and frothy eloquence neither convinces nor satisfies me. I am from Missouri. You have got to show me (2).
“Show Me” is only the unofficial motto of Missouri, however. The official state motto is Latin: Salus Populi Suprema Lex Esto (“Let the Welfare of the People Be the Supreme Law”). In fact, more than half of states in the union have mottoes in languages other than English (3).
When it comes to applying words to the page, all writers should think of Missouri and Vandiver’s demand to be shown rather than told.
Whether writing fiction or nonfiction, good writers craft their sentences with concrete details and imagery. Like Vandiver’s “corn and cotton and cockleburs,” good writers watch out for focusing too much on abstract language by including plenty of concrete nouns and vivid verbs.
The two words “for example” are possibly the two most important words in a writer’s lexicon. These two words remind writers to support the abstract with the concrete, to balance the general with the specific, and not just to tell the reader, but also to show the reader with specific, detailed examples.
The following are other transitional expressions you can use to signal the reader that you are going to show rather than just tell:
an example of this is
Notice how each of the following examples uses one of the previous signal expressions to connect the gap between general, telling statement and specific, showing examples:
Americans love their dogs. For example, more than 80 percent of dog owners say that they would risk their life for their dog.
Computers have come a long way. To illustrate, today’s musical greeting car is more powerful than the world’s most powerful computer was sixty years ago.
Today’s Challenge: Tell Me, But Also Show Me
What examples would you give to support or refute the following generalization: “Life today is much more hectic than it was fifty years ago”?Select one of the three general telling statements below and either support or refute it with specific showing examples, details and evidence:
Life today is much more hectic than it was fifty years ago.
Technology has made communications today much more effective than it was fifty years ago.
Hard work and diligent effort are often much more valuable than relying solely on good luck. (Common Core Writing 1 – Argument)
Quotation of the Day: Don’t tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass.”–Anton Chekhov
1 – The Library of Congress. American Memory. “Today in History: August 10.” http://memory.loc.gov/ammem/today/aug10.html
2 – Missouri Secretary of State’s Officehttp://www.sos.mo.gov/archives/history/slogan.asp
3 – U.S. State Mottos –http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_U.S._state_mottos